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Jul 19, 2009 - 28 comments

I don't usually post my poems. But I felt like it. So here's my crappy poem.

**Please don't use my poems without my permission. How'd you like it if I borrowed your dog? Yeah, you wouldn't. K, thanks.

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I forgot how nice the touch of silver was
Laying heavy in my hands, screaming
My steel lover places a kiss upon my arms
I watch the crimson gently pulse, tears streaming

A numbness overcomes me, like a straight Novocain injection
Succumbed into a large, black, empty abyss
I want your words to stop. The razor's shaking in my hand
Nothing should I see - my eyes blinded by tears, a scarlet mist

The tears sting my face as I embrace my mistakes
I can’t stand to live like this, I’ve never felt so alone
Dearest mom and dad, this is the end, I feel faint
I didn’t want leave like this, but tonight I have to go

These last breaths I’m taking hurt, the air is so thick
I see the angels swarming, readying to kiss me goodnight
They placate, “Float, sweet one, to a better place,”
I love you, I must go. The angels are taking flight.

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by turkee23, Jul 19, 2009
very nice...... how are u doing??? everything ok???.......you kno im here 4 you if you need it ......

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 19, 2009
I'm pretty fricken horrible.

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by Dazon50, Jul 19, 2009

Hi!

Thanks for sharing your poem.  I don't think what you wrote was crappy.  You captured & framed some moments/emotions.  It gave me a glimpse.

Your life won't always be limited to where you are now.  

:-],
Dazon


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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
Thank you.

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by margypops, Jul 20, 2009
Beautiful poem you truly have a gift..... it could be used to help others have you tried to get a book of them together, could you share with us how you are feeling today , you said you feel horrible , maybe we can help, talking is good ...

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by sunshine1976, Jul 20, 2009
This does not suck!

This poem is a wonderful expression of feeling & fear.

If you need anything we're all ears.


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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
Thanks. I'm not sure what you'd classify a 'book' as. I have about 10 pages of poems in a word document, if that has any affiliation..

I'm still not feeling too well today, thank you for asking. I don't know how I can explain how I feel..

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by jimi1822, Jul 20, 2009
Iwouldbdanielle,

        Hi I'm jimi, Wow, what a powerful expression of how you were feeling at the time you wrote this poem. Your
        very talented! I would Love  for you to post more of you poems as some of the best lyrics for songs were
        written by our Brothers and Sisters who  have been in a the valley. And they chose to share it and bring it into
        the light... and a lot of us can identify with those feelings I'm going to share one of my most favorite quotes and
        poems with you as your a very special Caring, sharing, and Giving person indeed =0)

                                                                    "A whole person is one who walks with
                                                                    GOD and also has wrestled with the devil."

                                                                                    ~ Carl G. Jung, Swiss psychiatrist, and thinker and  founder
                                                                                                            of analytical psychology (1875 - 1961)
                                          

                                                                                       Above the cloud
                                                                                           with its shadow
                                                                                    Is the star
                                                                                               with its light....

                                                                                                            ~ Victor Hugo, French poet, novelist, and
                                                                                                                                  essayist (1802 -1885)

                                                        
                                                                                                         much Love, much peace, much light.....

                                                                                                                                               jimi (little wing =0)

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
Thank you very very much, Jimi. Those are nice quotes ;] I'll be sure to post some more when I get the chance or when I get the nerve to.

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by lonelyinacrowd, Jul 20, 2009
i'm just visiting, searching for a board that would help me with my own demons.  i would just like to say that the feelings you are having can and will change.  they may never leave you, as mine hasn't now for over 20 yrs, but you learn to feel through them for just a glimmer of hope.  your poem is powerful.  i can only imagine what you write when you are in a good place, i bet it is awesome.

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
3 years seems so long, how could you handle 20? I just write whatever I feel, see... Thanks ;D

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by lonelyinacrowd, Jul 20, 2009
i stay with my meds and when i'm down like i've been lately, i seek out like i'm doing now.  i keep on keeping on, it's hard as hell sometimes. i have kids too.  i know what it's like when a close family member takes their own life, i couldn't do that to them.

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
I hated the way my meds made me feel. And I hate the idea that I need medication to make me better, when it's not even a true feeling. Nothing but a pure medicated slip of the brain. With the economy and half of the world "going down", I think another depression is going to submerge.

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by jimi1822, Jul 20, 2009
                                                               Life can be so puzzling.
                                                               Just when everything is going smoothly,
                                                               Out of the blue    in sails a storm ----
                                                                    in the guise of illness, accident,
                                                                    or disease.

                                                                It's natural to ask GOD,
                                                                 "Why me?"            "Why now?"
                                                                Were told that GOD works in mysterious ways,
                                                                so it's only by taking the time to turn inward
                                                                      as our misfortune has forced us to do ----
                                                                we realize that rather than focusing
                                                                on how much we have lost,
                                                                our reflection has helped us to see
                                                                how much
                                                                We Still Have....


                                                                                                                        ~ Carolyn Matthews, author

                                                                                                                                              <3 jimi <3

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
Where do you find these, Jimi? I really like that one.

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by jimi1822, Jul 20, 2009
This one, I found in "Comfort Prayers" by June Cotner =0)

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by jimi1822, Jul 20, 2009
Prayers & Poems to Comfort, Encourage & Inspire =0) :o)=)

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
Hmm. Interesting :]
I wish mine were that good.

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by jimi1822, Jul 20, 2009
They are just Believe in Yourself =0) I know GOD Believes in You....

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
Why would I do that? No sense in getting my hopes up.

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by jimi1822, Jul 20, 2009
                                                       Hope is the thing with feathers
                                                       That perches in the soul,
                                                       And sings the tune without words,
                                                       And never stops at all.


                                                                                                   ~ Emily Dickinson, American poet,
                                                                                                                                   (1830 -1886)


                                                       "Whether you be man or woman
                                                         you will never do anything in this
                                                         world without Courage. It is the
                                                         Greatest quality of the mind next
                                                         to Honor."

                                                                                                          ~ James L. Allen, author

                                                                                                             I already know you have courage you put
                                                                                                             up your AweSome thought provoking poem =0)
                                                                                                             "Be the Difference you wish to see in the
                                                                                                              World....."

                                                                                                             ~ Mahatma Gandhi, Spiritual leader and
                                                                                                                                           Humanitarian (1869 - 1948)


                                                                                                                              I Believe in you =0)
                        


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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
Thanks, but I don't

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by jimi1822, Jul 20, 2009
You Will =0) Love, Share, Care and Believe....

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 20, 2009
...I don't want to.

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by jimi1822, Jul 21, 2009
Just be you and thats good enough.... =0)

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 21, 2009
Mm, okay..

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by ILADVOCATE, Aug 02, 2009
Poetry is an excellent means of self expression and everyone is entitled to their emotions even if they feel down at the time they wrote the poem. Truthfully, I was encouraged many years ago in high school by an English teacher to work on a project where I would send out my poems to poetry journals to get them published and it eventually worked out. More importantly it gave me a sense of self definition that helped me carry on in life and that was before I had even started treatment or been diagnosed. Its essential to understand that at all times that you are entitled to any feelings you have and that if society has any disregard for you, let that come from them. I consider that a quite well written poem. Don't let the state you wrote the poem in put down the writing itself.

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by iwouldbdanielle, Aug 02, 2009
I wish I had that sort of encouragement. I'm really glad things worked out for you, too!

And my state of being tends to take on an overall effect on everything.

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