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We all carry these things inside that no one else can see...

Jul 21, 2010 - 9 comments

...they hold us down like anchors, they drown us out at sea. I look up to the sky, there may be nothing there to see.
But if I don't believe in him, why would he believe in me? --- Chelsea Smile by Bring Me The Horizon. (screamo, but great lyrics)

So, I've been writing a story... again. My boyfriend is really into writing stories and he knows I used to be as well, so he's making me write in return so we can critique each other's work.

Would anyone be interested in reading what I write as I go? So far I only have a page written, but I have the entire plot organized.

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by jimi1822, Jul 21, 2010
I would Love to read what you write =0) please Share it with Us.... <3 jimi <3

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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 21, 2010
I'll post what I have so far, so people can get an idea of what's going down.
Please, do not steal my work. I wouldn't go to your house and kidnap your grandma --- same concept.
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Alyson clenched the bed sheets and groaned, rolling onto her side. Her small feet shuffled beneath the blankets and soon enough, tears began slipping down her cheek. After being kicked a few times, Brendon finally awoke to see Aly’s stirring. Immediately feeling the urge to protect her from whatever was harming her, he gently prodded her arm, “Aly…”
Aggressively pulling her arm away, Aly whimpered and turned her head, releasing a new batch of tears. “Alyson, wake up,” he whispered while lightly shaking her, “Aly, wake up! Please!”
“Mm, n..noooo..st..stop.” She slurred into her pillow.
Brendon grew worried as Aly was drug deeper into her night terror. They’d become regular, but he could never seem to get used to the midnight screaming, the kicking, the never-ending pleading to stop. Brendon didn’t mind being woken up at all. The only thing that bothered him was the fact that he had known Aly since second grade, and she still wouldn’t tell him what the night terrors were about.
“ALYSON!” Brendon spoke louder, grasping her shoulders and lightly shaking her.
Aly’s eyes shot open to see her best friend huddled over her. “B-Brendon, I’m so sorry,” she spoke through her sobbing.
“It’s fine, you’re fine.”
She nodded and sniffled, cupping her face into her hands.
“You are fine aren’t you?”
Alyson nodded once again, hiking her knees beneath her chin and wrapping her arms around them.
He returned the gesture as the two fell silent for a moment. “It’s okay, you know… I don’t care about being woken up. I just care that you’re all right.”
The silence remained and Brendon realized that no consoling words would ease Aly’s mind. He extended his arms and pulled her into his chest, letting her head rest on his shoulder. “There. Now you’ll be fine, I promise. Why don’t you head back to sleep, Aly? We’ve both got school in the morning, and frankly we need the sleep.”
Brendon soothingly rubbed Alyson’s back as she whimpered in fearful relief. His rhythmic, rubbing motion slowly lulled them both back into their safe slumbers.

Brendon, feeling the bed shift beneath him, peeked over to see Aly rolling out of bed. “Aly, what time is it?”
“Oh, good! You’re up! We overslept. We’ve only got maybe 20 minutes to get ready,” she noted, yanking the still warm blanket from Brendon, “so you had better get your butt moving!” She added, smiling sleepily.
“Demands, demands,” he grinned, pulling himself out of bed.

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by jimi1822, Jul 21, 2010
Danielle, I Love It =0) your a most Wonderful and natural writer InDeed!!!! I can't wait to read the rest of the story =0) =) :)


                                                                                                              

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by teko, Jul 22, 2010
Very Talented! Keep going!

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by margypops, Jul 22, 2010
ooohhhh yes I would be interested , we have a couple of published authors on MH ...

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by boldsojah4christ, Jul 22, 2010
Amen!

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by Cassandrajane, Jul 23, 2010
I <3 BMTH...
My friend from college is Oli sykes Best friend! How weird!, and my best friend served him in a pub!! And after Oli walked away my best friend jumped up and down screaming like a girl, going I met Oli Sykes!

LOL!


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by iwouldbdanielle, Jul 23, 2010
I used to LOVE Oli Sykes, but then I heard he doesn't even scream. He supposedly whispers into the mic and they vamp the volume. D:

If you love BMTH, we could be great friends! Haha

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by Nat_16, Jul 23, 2010
Danielle, You are a fantastic writer!!  What you have so far is amazing!!!  Keep it up!! :)

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